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What do you like to know about your friend when you keep up with her/him?

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I would like to know about my friends' whereabouts who live in South Korea when I try to keep up with them. But over time, it's hard to keep up because of jet lag. So when I usually try to connect them it is night time here. My friends just drift apart naturally. It felt difficult because I didn't have many friends and family here since I came here. However I got used to living here now. Even though it's not often, sometimes I try to meet my friends through virtual. Sadly we could not talk for a long time but I really enjoyed sharing our lives and prayer lists. When I lived in South Korea, I had so many friends. but I have very few friends here now. I really wondered why God sent me here until a few years ago. I have been obsessed with my relationship with my people who live in South Korea because I was very lonely. But I realized that what's the most important relationship with me in my life. The most important relationship is God. So I really want to be satisfied with God. Thank you!

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

I was touched when you mentioned that the most important relationship is the relationship with God, Jane! I couldn't agree more! Amen!-Faith-
I would like to know about my friends' whereabouts who live in South Korea when I try to keep up with them. 
>> CORRECT
But over time, it's hard to keep up because of jet lag. 
>> CORRECT
OR But as time goes by, it's hard to keep up because of time difference.
So when I usually try to connect them it is night time here. 
>> So when I usually try to connect with them, it is nighttime here. 
My friends just drift apart naturally. 
>> CORRECT
It felt difficult because I didn't have many friends and family here since I came here. 
>> CORRECT
OR It was tough especially that I didn't have friends and family here. 
However I got used to living here now. 
>> However, I got used to living here now. 
Even though it's not often, sometimes I try to meet my friends through virtual. 
>> Even though it's not often, sometimes I try to meet my friends virtually. 
Sadly we could not talk for a long time but I really enjoyed sharing our lives and prayer lists. 
>> CORRECT
When I lived in South Korea, I had so many friends. 
>> CORRECT
but I have very few friends here now.
>> But I have very few friends here now.
I really wondered why God sent me here until a few years ago. 
>> CORRECT
OR It was only a few years ago when I found out why God sent me here.
I have been obsessed with my relationship with my people who live in South Korea because I was very lonely. 
>> I have been obsessed with my relationship with other people who live in South Korea because I was very lonely. 
But I realized that what's the most important relationship with me in my life. 
>> But I realized what the most important relationship is in my life. 
The most important relationship is God. 
>> The most important relationship is with God. 
So I really want to be satisfied with God. 
>> CORRECT
Thank you!
>> CORRECT
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