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The companies should keep the local fire, emergency laws and rules
for the people's safety and using materials to design a lot of buildings,
when the design members should be accomplished the fire-fighting system
concerned the special, industrial and high-rising buildings.

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Hi Jin!

This is one long very informative sentence. When companies are able to keep the law, there would not be any tragic problem.

Kindly take note of some punctuations and additional words that I have placed for suggestion. They were underlined so that you can see them easily. A job well done on this answer!

See you next week!

-T. Donna =)

The companies should keep the local fire, emergency laws and rules
for the people's safety and using materials to design a lot of buildings,
when the design members should be accomplished the fire-fighting system
concerned the special, industrial and high-rising buildings.
>>  The companies should keep the local fire emergency laws and rules
for the people's safety and use materials to design a lot of buildings,
when the design members should accomplish the fire-fighting system
concerned with the special, industrial, and high-rising buildings.
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