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Nowadays many people keep busy.
So they are in home do what they want to do.
And have many hobbies so they can choose hobbies.
But read is some people likes and some people don't like.
I think because reading is many times and solo activity.

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Good day, Chaeyeong!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

Nowadays many people keep busy.
>> Nowadays, many people keep themselves busy.
So they are in home do what they want to do.
>> So, they just stay at home and do what they want to do.
OR >> So, they just stay at home and do whatever they want.
And have many hobbies so they can choose hobbies.
>> Also, they may have many hobbies, so they can do their hobbies on their free time.
But read is some people likes and some people don't like.
>>But, reading is something that people like, and some people don't.
I think because reading is many times and solo activity.
>> I think it is because reading takes a lot of time and it is just a solo activity.

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