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The worst problem is that young people who have not received parents financial support are losing hope and enthusiasm of youth.
This socirty make them lose of the life.
They try to pursue good luck rather than work.

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Good morning Ma'am Lily! Thank you once again for spending time writing your thoughts.
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 The worst problem is that young people who have not received parents financial support are losing hope and enthusiasm of youth.
>>>  The worst problem is that young people who have not received their parents' financial support are losing the hope and enthusiasm of the youth.
This socirty make them lose of the life.
>>> This society makes them lose hope in life.
They try to pursue good luck rather than work.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >> They try to depend on luck rather than working.
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