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When I was a high school student, I wanted to become a teacher who teaches the Bible to youth. The reason was that first, I just loved God. Second, I wanted to lead well people who want to know God in a spiritual way. I wanted to give God joy through my job. As a result, I became a pastor and Christian educational director at a Korean church. I wanted to go wherever God calls me. but this life is not easy for me. God also loves me but He gives me hard training that I don't want to or I don't imagine to me sometimes. During hard times, I complained a lot to God. However after training, I realized that God wanted to make me grow up. I want to know what God wants me to do. So I just try to live to follow Jesus everyday and I just want to do my best in my life with God. That's my great joy here and now! I'm sure that God leads the best way for me now even though I'm nothing.

I surely will miss you too!! Thank God for knowing you! Thank you, Faith! :)

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This is also another good realization of yours, Jane! I know that God is really guiding you all the time! I can't wait to see you tomorrow!-Faith-
When I was a high school student, I wanted to become a teacher who teaches the Bible to youth. 
>> When I was a high school student, I wanted to become a teacher who teaches the Bible to the youth. 
OR When I was a high school student, I wanted to become a youth Bible teacher.
The reason was that first, I just loved God. 
>> CORRECT
Second, I wanted to lead well people who want to know God in a spiritual way. 
>> Second, I wanted to lead people well who want to know God in a spiritual way. 
I wanted to give God joy through my job. 
>> CORRECT
OR I wanted to give back the glory to God by my job.
As a result, I became a pastor and Christian educational director at a Korean church. 
>> CORRECT
I wanted to go wherever God calls me. 
>> I wanted to go wherever God called me. 
but this life is not easy for me. 
>> But this life is not easy for me. 
God also loves me but He gives me hard training that I don't want to or I don't imagine to me sometimes. 
>> God also loves me but He gives me a hard training that I don't want or I don't want to imagine sometimes. 
During hard times, I complained a lot to God. 
>> During hard times, I complain a lot to God. 
However after training, I realized that God wanted to make me grow up. 
>> However, after each training I realized that God wanted me to grow. 
I want to know what God wants me to do. 
>> CORRECT
So I just try to live to follow Jesus everyday and I just want to do my best in my life with God. 
>> So I just try to live to follow Jesus every day and I just want to do my best in my life with God. 
That's my great joy here and now!
>> That's my great joy here and now! 
I'm sure that God leads the best way for me now even though I'm nothing.
>> CORRECT
I surely will miss you too!! 
>> CORRECT
Thank God for knowing you! 
>> I thank God for knowing you! 
Thank you, Faith! :)
>> CORRECT
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