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how to help friends

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I'm help friends to speaking good.
That is because communication is very important to friends.
My second reason is when we don't communication with friends, kids can leave friends.
My third reason is speaking good is good for friends.
Finally, friends can help me too.

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Hi, Joey! Thank you for answering your homework. Please take note of the corrections.

- Teacher Debbie

I'm help friends to speaking good.
>> I help my friends to speak good.

That is because communication is very important to friends.
>> That is because communication is very important to people.

My second reason is when we don't communication with friends, kids can leave friends.
>> The second reason is when we don't communicate with our friends, they might leave us.

My third reason is speaking good is good for friends.
>> The third reason is speaking well is good for friends.

Finally, friends can help me too.
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