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If you can change something in the culture in South Korea, what would it be and why?

작성자: 류*주
2021-10-18 361

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If I can change something in the culture in South Korea, I want to change Confucianism.
Confucianism is very great thought because it tells a person has to respect and considerate other people.
But in South Korea, people think the young have to respect and considerate the old more stronger.
So most of younger people use honorific and they considerate certain things to older people.
But I think we have to respect and considerate all people weather a person is younger or older.
So If I can change something in the culture in South Korea, I want to change Confucianism.
As I talked, Confucianism is not a bad thought because it tells a person has to respect and considerate all people.
But Korea understood it badly and they thought younger people have to respect older people more.
So I just want to change this culture.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi John:)

Korea's culture is actually great. But like any other cultures, it also has flaws. Some people want to prolong it and some don't. It is always different based on people's perspectives. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If I can change something in the culture in South Korea, I want to change Confucianism.
>> If I can change something in the culture in South Korea, it would be "Confucianism". 

Confucianism is very great thought because it tells a person has to respect and considerate other people.
>> Confucianism is a great thought because it tells a person to respect and be considerate of other people.

But in South Korea, people think the young have to respect and considerate the old more stronger.
>> But in South Korea, people think the young people have to respect and consider older people. 

So most of younger people use honorific and they considerate certain things to older people.
>> That's why the younger generation use honorific words and they are very considerate towards older people. 

But I think we have to respect and considerate all people weather a person is younger or older.
>>But I think we have to respect and be considerate to everyone regardless of their age. 

So If I can change something in the culture in South Korea, I want to change Confucianism.
>> So if I can change something in the culture in South Korea, it would be Confucianism.

As I talked, Confucianism is not a bad thought because it tells a person has to respect and considerate all people.
>> As I said, Confucianism is not a bad thing because it teaches us to respect the elderly people. 

But Korea understood it badly and they thought younger people have to respect older people more.
>> But Koreans misinterpret it and think that younger people have to respect older people more. 

So I just want to change this culture.
>> CORRECT
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