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My life final goal is gonna be broadway star.
Last month, l have joined some audition.
The musical title is 'KPOP'.
I am in the last fainal call, but finally I fail down that audition.
But I'm not Frustration.
I believe, next time I have another chance becoming to me.
So I decide to start learning English.

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Hi Ann:)

Learning English as a foreign language will allow you to communicate with native speakers and ESL (English as a Second language). You will be able to gain a new perspective of the world, enhance your ability to communicate and understand yourself and others better.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

My life final goal is gonna be broadway star.
>> My final goal is to become a Broadway star. 

Last month, l have joined some audition.
>> Last month, I joined a competition. 

The musical title is 'KPOP'.
>> The musicals title is "KPOP".

I am in the last fainal call, but finally I fail down that audition.
>>> I made it to the final call but I failed the competition. 

But I'm not Frustration.
>> I didn't get frustrated. 

I believe, next time I have another chance becoming to me.
>> I believe that I will have another chance. 

So I decide to start learning English.
>> That's why I decided to learn English. 
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