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How do you feel about fashion brands embracing \'Body-Positive\' mannequins?

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I like the idea of Body-Positive mannequins because company starts to think first customers who have potential to buy their items. Lots of foreign brands keep their standard size in terms of their people’s size and they export the same standard size products to other countries regardless of buyer countries’ standard size. When I shop at international brand stores, it is difficult to find the regular sizes which are suit for me. I have to cut it up after buying some items or there is no size for me.
Currently, the company tries to use body-positive mannequins for the display. As a result, we can judge how good I look before I put them on. On the contrary, though the mannequins look good and gorgeous, when it doesn’t match with me after we put them on, I will not buy those clothes and I am not going to shop there any longer. I will think this shop doesn’t have what I would like to buy, and I will lose attraction to the shop.

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Hello there Sun Jung! Thank you for finding time to write abut your homework. 
~ Aki :)
I like the idea of Body-Positive mannequins because company starts to think first customers who have potential to buy their items. 
>>> I like the idea of Body-Positive mannequins because the company starts to think first about customers who have the potential to buy their items.
Lots of foreign brands keep their standard size in terms of their people’s size and they export the same standard size products to other countries regardless of buyer countries’ standard size. 
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>>Many foreign brands keep and export their standard size mannequin to other countries regardless of buyer countries’ standard size. 
When I shop at international brand stores, it is difficult to find the regular sizes which are suit for me. I have to cut it up after buying some items or there is no size for me.
>>> When I shop at international brand stores, it is difficult to find the regular sizes which are suitable for me. I have to cut it up after buying some items or there is no available size for me.
Currently, the company tries to use body-positive mannequins for the display. As a result, we can judge how good I look before I put them on. 
>>> Currently, the company tries to use body-positive mannequins for the display. As a result, we can judge how good do we look before putting them on.
On the contrary, though the mannequins look good and gorgeous, when it doesn’t match with me after we put them on, I will not buy those clothes and I am not going to shop there any longer.
>>> On the contrary, though the mannequins look good and gorgeous, when it doesn’t match me after we put them on, I will not buy those clothes and I am not going to shop there any longer.
>>> On the contrary, though the mannequins look good and gorgeous, when it doesn’t match with my preference after putting them on, I will not buy those clothes and not going to shop there anymore.
 I will think this shop doesn’t have what I would like to buy, and I will lose attraction to the shop.
>>> I will think that this shop doesn’t have what would I like to buy, and I will lose attraction to the shop.
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