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Why is English fluency significant for you?

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Because I want to work for a trading company.
In a trading company, I have to speak, listen and write in English.
In privious company, I had a lot of difficultifes because of my poor English skill.
So, I want to do my work very well with fluency English skill.

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Hi Jennifer:)

Learning English as a foreign language will allow you to communicate with native speakers and ESL (English as a Second language). You will be able to gain a new perspective of the world, enhance your ability to communicate and understand yourself and others better.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

 Because I want to work for a trading company.
>> It is because I want to work for a trading company. 

In a trading company, I have to speak, listen and write in English.
>> CORRECT

In privious company, I had a lot of difficultifes because of my poor English skill.
>> In my previous company, I had a lot of difficulties because of my poor English skills. 

So, I want to do my work very well with fluency English skill.
>> So, I want to do my work very well with fluent English skill.


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