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Best thing of birthplace

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My birthplace best thing is that is country
beautiful, so green, with fresh air and quiet.
When I was young, I every morning wake up with sound of birth.
now I miss that everything.

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Hello Ethan!

This is a very good description of your hometown. It feels very peaceful and serene in this place according to your description. I hope that you can go there again and visit soon.

Well done on your homework! Kindly go over some of my suggestions to make your sentences even more complete.

See you in class tomorrow! Keep up the good work!

-T. Donna =)

My birthplace best thing is that is country

beautiful, so green, with fresh air and quiet.
>> My birthplace's best thing is that it is in the countryside
and it's beautiful, so green, with fresh air, and quiet.


When I was young, I every morning wake up with sound of birth.
now I miss that everything.
>>  When I was young, I every wake up morning with sounds of birds.
Now I miss everything.
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