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What are your bad behaviors and how are you going to change them?

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What are your bad behaviors and how are you going to change them?

I have habit of eating food fast.
When I eat something food, I am always thinking about chewing often and slowly.
Habit of eating quick fast is well than in the past.
However, it is hard to get rid of a bad habit.

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Hi Monica :)

Bad habits interrupt your life and prevent you from accomplishing your goals. They jeopardize your health - both mentally and physically. And they waste your time and energy.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I have habit of eating food fast.
>> I have a habit of eating fast. 

When I eat something food, I am always thinking about chewing often and slowly.
>> When I eat some food, I always think about chewing slowly. 

Habit of eating quick fast is well than in the past.
>> I had this habit since before. 

However, it is hard to get rid of a bad habit.
>> CORRECT
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