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What are your bad behaviors and how are you going to change them?

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I don't usually do this but I sometimes speak bad words to other people.
If I get surprise or if I had unlucky or angry events, then I speak bad words.
But I think I can stop speaking bad words when I had unlucky or angry events because what I have to do is just control my emotions.
The problem is I can't stop speaking bad words when I get surprised about something.
It is very hard to stop because it became one of my habits.
So I think if I want to stop it, I have to use right words and I shouldn't think about the bad words.
The reason that I am speaking bad words is it became one of my habits.
So I have to have a new great habit that speaking right words to other people.
If I keep doing it, it will be my habit so I think I can fix speaking bad words.

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Hi John:)

Bad habits interrupt your life and prevent you from accomplishing your goals. They jeopardize your health - both mentally and physically. And they waste your time and energy.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.


I don't usually do this but I sometimes speak bad words to other people.
>> I don't usually do this but I sometimes say bad words to other people.

If I get surprise or if I had unlucky or angry events, then I speak bad words.
>> If I get surprise or something unlucky happens, I curse. 

But I think I can stop speaking bad words when I had unlucky or angry events because what I have to do is just control my emotions.
>> Sometimes I can't help but do it because I can't control my emotions. 

The problem is I can't stop speaking bad words when I get surprised about something.
>> The problem is that I do it unconsciously. 

It is very hard to stop because it became one of my habits.
>> CORRECT

So I think if I want to stop it, I have to use right words and I shouldn't think about the bad words.
>> So I think if I want to stop it, I have to use the right words and I shouldn't think about bad words.

The reason that I am speaking bad words is it became one of my habits.
>> The reason behind this is because it has become one of my habits. 

So I have to have a new great habit that speaking right words to other people.
>> So I need to come up with a new good habit. 

If I keep doing it, it will be my habit so I think I can fix speaking bad words.
>> If I keep doing it, it will be my habit so I think I can fix this bad one. 
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