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World without clock(tools to tell time): really terrible

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I think world without tools to tell time will be really terrible. We can't do something on time, and don't know accuracy time. It can cause lots of problems. For example, we can late many times for school because real time is 8:30 but we can know that time is 7:30, so we can late 1 hour for school! And, when we play game, we feel the time goes very fast, so we may feel the time that play game is one hour but real play time can be 3 hours. In conclusion, we need any tools to tell times.

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Hello, Daniel! You were able to answer the question correctly. Good!  However, be careful with sentence construction please.

- Teacher Debbie

I think world without tools to tell time will be really terrible.
>> I think a world without tools to tell time would really be terrible.

We can't do something on time, and don't know accuracy time. 
>> We couldn't do something on time, and we wouldn't know the actual time.

It can cause lots of problems.
>> It could cause lots of problems.

For example, we can late many times for school because real time is 8:30 but we can know that time is 7:30, so we can late 1 hour for school! 
>> For example, we could be late for school several times because we didn't have any means to tell time.

And, when we play game, we feel the time goes very fast, so we may feel the time that play game is one hour but real play time can be 3 hours. 
>> Moreover, we couldn't notice how much time we spend playing games.

In conclusion, we need any tools to tell times.
>> In conclusion, we need any tools to tell time.
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