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My weekday schedule

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These day, I have performance every weekday.
My company made the schedule and then they give it to me.
Now I'm join in an educational musical that visits schools.
Schools open at weekday so I have performance only weekdays.
Weekend they are getting rest.
When I see the student audiences face, I'm so proud of this education performance.

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These day, I have performance every weekday.
>> These days, I have performance every weekday.

My company made the schedule and then they give it to me.
>> My company made the schedule and game it to me. 

Now I'm join in an educational musical that visits schools.
>> Now, I am joining an educational musical that performs in different schools. 

Schools open at weekday so I have performance only weekdays.
>> Schools are open during weekdays so I only have to perform during those days. 

Weekend they are getting rest.
>> Weekends are meant for resting. 

When I see the student audiences face, I'm so proud of this education performance.
>> When I see the audience, I feel proud that I perform an educational performance. 
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