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Q:How can houses be made more environmentally friendly?
A:People should not use plastic when they are making house or living in a house.
Plastic can need more then hundred thousand years to be one hundred percent rotted.
Also, if they have a cow or sheep in there house or farm, then they can give them sea weeds instead of grass.
Then they can make less methane, so it can be help to stop air pollution before the earths' temperature gets really high.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


People should not use plastic when they are making house or living in a house.

>> People should not use plastic when they are making a house or living in a house.
Plastic can need more then hundred thousand years to be one hundred percent rotted.

>> Plastic needs more than a hundred thousand years to rot one hundred percent.
Also, if they have a cow or sheep in there house or farm, then they can give them sea weeds instead of grass.

>> Also, if they have a cow or sheep in their house or farm, then they can give them sea weeds instead of grass.
Then they can make less methane, so it can be help to stop air pollution before the earths' temperature gets really high.

>> Then they can make less methane, so it can be helpful in stopping air pollution before the earths' temperature gets really high.

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