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I think most terrible eye problem is loss of sight.
It is not hurt but every world is black.
So very sad and it will be hard to get back up.
But if every black, some people happy life.
So if every world black, we can life happy days because It is a matter of mind.

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Good day, Chaeyeong!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

I think most terrible eye problem is loss of sight.
>> I think the most terrible eye problem is loss of sight.
OR >>  I think the most terrible eye problem is blindness.
It is not hurt but every world is black.
>> It doesn't hurt, but everything is black.
OR >> It doesn't hurt, but everything is dark.
So very sad and it will be hard to get back up.
>> It is a very sad situation, and it will be hard to get back up on your feet.
But if every black, some people happy life.
>> But even if everything is black, some people try to live a happy life.
So if every world black, we can life happy days because It is a matter of mind.
>> So even if everything around us in the world would be black, we can still live a happy life because it is a matter of mind.

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