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1. What are the benefits of playing sports?
Team sports are good ways to develop cooperative spirit. It help us to foster sociality which is important for career.
And all kind of sport gives us energy that comes after physical activities and fulfilling experience. It affects us positively.

2. If there is a sport that you wish you could be good at, what would it be?
If I could have wonderful skills in a sport, I would choose martial arts. If I have full power and fighting skills, I would be more confident and protect myself from others. :>

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Good afternoon, Yu Jeong! 

Thank you for sharing your thoughts about the homework questions. :) I only have a few comments/ suggestions for the answers. Please take a look at them below: 

1. What are the benefits of playing sports?

Your answer: Team sports are good ways to develop cooperative spirit. It help us to foster sociality which is important for career. And all kind of sport gives us energy that comes after physical activities and fulfilling experience. It affects us positively.
>> Playing team sports is a good way to develop cooperative spirit. It helps us to be more sociable which is important for our careers. All kinds of sport gives us energy that comes after physical activities and fulfilling experience. It affects us positively.

2. If there is a sport that you wish you could be good at, what would it be?

Your answer: If I could have wonderful skills in a sport, I would choose martial arts. If I have full power and fighting skills, I would be more confident and protect myself from others. :>
>> If I could have wonderful skills in a sport, I would choose martial arts. If I have full power and fighting skills, I would be more confident to protect myself from others. :>

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Awesome work as always! :) 

See you later in class! 

~Miya^^
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