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My hardest problem in my life

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My hardest problem is relationship with other people.
Every people have different personality.
I think my personality is positive and energetic.
So sometime other people, they feeling to me uncomfortable and so high tension.
But they are very few people.
In my opinion, my personality's most important thing is friendship.
When I fight other person or friends, I feel so uncomfortable.

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Hi Ann:)

Challenges and problems are important parts of life that give you experiences, make you learn and help you to become wiser and stronger. Problems make us grow and shape us. The biggest problem people have is that they hope for a life without problems. Regardless of the result, value the experience and personal growth.

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My hardest problem is relationship with other people.
>>My hardest problem is building relationships with other people.

Every people have different personality.
>> Every person has different personalities. 

I think my personality is positive and energetic.
>> I think my personality is that I am positive and energetic.

So sometime other people, they feeling to me uncomfortable and so high tension.
>> So for some people, they sometimes feel uncomfortable when I show these personalities of mine. 

But they are very few people.
>> But it only happens to a few people. 

In my opinion, my personality's most important thing is friendship.
>> In my opinion, our personalities are very important roles in friendship. 

When I fight other person or friends, I feel so uncomfortable.
>> When I fight with other my friends or other people, I feel so uncomfortable.

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