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What is the hardest problem you have ever faced in your life? Explain briefly.

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I think the hardest problem I had ever faced in my life is the problem about my conscience.
It is sometimes very hard to do a right thing about some situation.
All people may made many faults because they have bad minds in their minds.
It cause a lot of problems and also it is an act that I am deceiving myself.
And humans are very easy to deceive themselves.
So I think the hardest problem I had ever faced in my life is the problem about my conscience.
Also I think it is the most important problem that I have to fix.

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Hi John:)

Challenges and problems are important parts of life that give you experiences, make you learn and help you to become wiser and stronger. Problems make us grow and shape us. The biggest problem people have is that they hope for a life without problems. Regardless of the result, value the experience and personal growth.

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I think the hardest problem I had ever faced in my life is the problem about my conscience.
>> I think the hardest problem I had ever faced in my life is fighting my conscience.

It is sometimes very hard to do a right thing about some situation.
>> It is sometimes very hard to do the right thing on certain situations. 

All people may made many faults because they have bad minds in their minds.
>> Everyone has made faults because of their bad doing and bad decisions. 

It cause a lot of problems and also it is an act that I am deceiving myself.
>> It causes a lot of problems and also it is an act that I deceive in. 

And humans are very easy to deceive themselves.
>> Humans can easily get deceived. 

So I think the hardest problem I had ever faced in my life is the problem about my conscience.
>> So I think the hardest problem I had ever faced in my life is fighting my conscience.

Also I think it is the most important problem that I have to fix.
>>Also, I think it is the most important problem that I have to fix.

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