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Next year is the day of Korea's presidential election.
Korean politicians have two main political groups.
Progress and conservative group.
When election season comes, politicians start election campaigns in their group.

Representative nomally find a number of influential people to support them and make promises.

These days, i can see a lot of fights between presidential candidates on Korean tv.
I can see a lot of people trying to push the other person away with past mistakes.

As a person of the people, I think it's very weired and stupid.

but, someone will be elected to president next year and he have to lead our country for five years.

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Hi Evan:)

The election is about to come very soon. Political candidates are already preparing their campaigns. They have their own tactics on how to pursue the citizens. Some are effective and some are not. Despite those, we still need to be vigilant and aware of what they will do for the country. We should be wise about voting. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Next year is the day of Korea's presidential election.
>> South Korea's presidential election will take place next year. 

Korean politicians have two main political groups.
>> CORRECT

Progress and conservative group.
>> They are the Progress and Conservative parties. 

When election season comes, politicians start election campaigns in their group.
>> When the election season comes, politicians start election campaigns within their group. 

Representative nomally find a number of influential people to support them and make promises.
>> 
Representatives normally find a number of influential people to support them and make promises.

These days, i can see a lot of fights between presidential candidates on Korean tv
>> These days, I can see a lot of fights between presidential candidates on Korean tv

I can see a lot of people trying to push the other person away with past mistakes.
>> 
I can see a lot of people trying to push the other person away with their past mistakes.

As a person of the people, I think it's very weired and stupid.
>> As a person, I think it's weird and stupid. 

but, someone will be elected to president next year and he have to lead our country for five years.
>> Nevertheless,  someone will be elected as president next year and has to lead our country for five years.

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