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Journal

작성자: 류*선
2021-10-23 224

회원님의 영작문

It is sometimes difficult to recognize what I feel. I used to be emotionally numb. There are some reasons. I recently learned that my trauma has made me deny or ignore exploring my primary emotions. It is because painful experiences and trauma are too heavy to deal with or cope with. It has become my emotional patterns. I subconsciously have avoided dealing with my young-self. I didn't want to accept the reality and behind stories. I must be brave and courageous to explore and look at the reality of my past, especially traumatic experiences from my relationships and family. Powerlessness, grief, abandonment, inferiority, emptiness, disappointment, littleness, loneliness, etc. All those emotions are under sadness. I lift them up to my Lord for healing and recovery from His original blessings. Jesus knew and experienced those emotions when he was abandoned and died on the cross. But He resurrected from death. I pray that I also experience and live out the power of resurrection. Amen!

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Amen and amen to that, Han! Your testimony is remarkable and I learned from it! Thank you! -Faith-
It is sometimes difficult to recognize what I feel. 
>> CORRECT
I used to be emotionally numb. 
>> CORRECT
There are some reasons. 
>> There are some reasons behind that.
I recently learned that my trauma has made me deny or ignore exploring my primary emotions. 
>> CORRECT
It is because painful experiences and trauma are too heavy to deal with or cope with.
>> CORRECT
 It is because painful experiences and trauma are cumbersome.
It has become my emotional patterns. 
>> It has become my emotional pattern.
I subconsciously have avoided dealing with my young-self. 
>> I subconsciously have avoided dealing with my younger self. 
I didn't want to accept the reality and behind stories. 
>> I didn't want to accept the reality and the stories behind them. 
I must be brave and courageous to explore and look at the reality of my past, especially traumatic experiences from my relationships and family. 
>> CORRECT
OR I have to be valiant to dig deeper most importantly about my past relationships and family.
Powerlessness, grief, abandonment, inferiority, emptiness, disappointment, littleness, loneliness, etc. All those emotions are under sadness. 
>> Powerlessness, grief, abandonment, inferiority, emptiness, disappointment, littleness, loneliness, etc, all these emotions are under sadness. 
I lift them up to my Lord for healing and recovery from His original blessings. 
>> CORRECT
Jesus knew and experienced those emotions when he was abandoned and died on the cross. 
>> Jesus knew and experienced those emotions when he was abandoned and when he died on the cross. 
But He resurrected from death. 
>> But He was resurrected from death. 
I pray that I also experience and live out the power of resurrection. 
>> CORRECT
Amen!
>> CORRECT

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