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What jobs would be more promising in the future?

작성자: 류*연
2021-10-25 371

회원님의 영작문

Nowadays I can see the news some richer people travel the space after paying lots of money. I can see the space traveling is only for the scene of movie but it comes real. Additionally I can see a robot in the restaurant which takes an order and doing errands like making a simple food and serving the water. That is also what I have watched in the movie but I can see it in real life often. I realize the industry is changed and we should prepare the new generation. On the otherhands, I think some jobs will be unpromising because some will be replaced. Like a doctor, interpreter, translater, working in service field these jobs does not require a creative thing. It means a robot possibly work on it for the same routine. I think we need to educate and prepare for the changing situation and have to prepare for our future. The day will come so fast rather than I expect.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Thank you, Kaycee! You enlightened me with your thoughts. May we be able to keep up with this transition-Faith-
Nowadays I can see the news some richer people travel the space after paying lots of money. 
>> Nowadays, I can see some news that some richer people travel to the space after paying lots of money. 
I can see the space traveling is only for the scene of movie but it comes real. 
>> I can see that space traveling is only for a scene of a movie but it comes real. 
Additionally I can see a robot in the restaurant which takes an order and doing errands like making a simple food and serving the water. 
>> Additionally, I can see a robot in a restaurant which takes an order and do errands like making a simple food and serving water. 
That is also what I have watched in the movie but I can see it in real life often. 
>> That is also what I have watched in movies but I can see it nowadays in real life often. 
I realize the industry is changed and we should prepare the new generation. 
>> I realize the industry has changed and we should prepare the new generation. 
On the otherhands, I think some jobs will be unpromising because some will be replaced. 
>> On the other hand, I think some jobs will be unpromising because some will be replaced. 
Like a doctor, interpreter, translater, working in service field these jobs does not require a creative thing. 
>> Like for example a doctor, interpreter, translater, working in service field, etc., these jobs do not require creativity. 
It means a robot possibly work on it for the same routine. 
>> It means a robot can possibly work on it with the same routine. 
I think we need to educate and prepare for the changing situation and have to prepare for our future. 
>> I think we need to be educated and prepared for the changes for our future. 
The day will come so fast rather than I expect.
>> That day will come so fast rather than I expect.
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