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Most proud culture in Korea

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In my opinion, most proud of Korea culture is traditional clothes.
It name is han bok.
It's look like very gorgeous and beautiful.
I heard about many foreigners when the joined to Korea travel, they want to wear it.
So in Korea, we have so many hanbok borrow center nearby at traditional palace.
Like Gyeongbokgung.
And then they hang out with wear beautiful hanbok and join the take a picture.
Sometime, I saw that and so proud of our traditional clothes hanbok.

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Hi Ann:)

It is actually my goal to wear  that someday. :) 

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In my opinion, most proud of Korea culture is traditional clothes.
>> In my opinion, I am most proud of South Korea's traditional clothes. 

It name is han bok.
>> They are called "Hanbok". 

It's look like very gorgeous and beautiful.
>> It is gorgeous and beautiful. 

I heard about many foreigners when the joined to Korea travel, they want to wear it.
>> i heard that foreigners who visit our country usually wants to wear them. 

So in Korea, we have so many hanbok borrow center nearby at traditional palace.
>> That is why there is a traditional place in here where you can rent them. 

Like Gyeongbokgung.
>> For example, in Gyeongbokgung. 

And then they hang out with wear beautiful hanbok and join the take a picture.
>> People can wear this and hang out or maybe take some pictures with it. 

Sometime, I saw that and so proud of our traditional clothes hanbok.
>> When I see them wearing it, I feel very proud of out traditional clothes. 
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