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What culture in South Korea are you most proud of?

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South Korea has a special proud culture.
When I order something by delivery, the deliveryman leaves that at front of door.
If I forget to pick it up, it stays there all day. No one takes it.
I use my laptop at a coffee shop and leave it with my bag and I go to the bathroom.
When I come back to my table, no one touches my belongings.

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Hi Jennifer:)

People there are very disciplined. I hope it is the same with other countries as well. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

South Korea has a special proud culture.
>> South Korea has a special culture that I a proud of. 

When I order something by delivery, the deliveryman leaves that at front of door.
>> When I order something by delivery, the deliveryman leaves it at the front door.

If I forget to pick it up, it stays there all day. No one takes it.
>> CORRECT

I use my laptop at a coffee shop and leave it with my bag and I go to the bathroom.
>> I use my laptop in a coffee shop and leave it with my bag when I go to the bathroom.

When I come back to my table, no one touches my belongings.
>> CORRECT
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