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What culture in South Korea are you most proud of?

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2021-10-25 580

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In South Korea, there are many cultures formed when it was very long ago.
Our culture started about 4500 years ago so there are a lot of cultures in here.
And I am so proud of Korean language made when it was 1400s.
It is made by King Sejong and it is the only language we know the creator.
Also many historians, archeologists, and scientists are saying Korean language is very scientical language.
Also there are a lot of things that Korea language is great language.
But in my opinion, I think I am proud of the reason King Sejong made Korean language.
Before, many people in Korea were using Chinese language.
But it was hard to study so only aristocrats were able to learn it.
King Sejong was very sad about it because the aristocrats were only minority so most of people didn't know about the language.
And a lot of people had unfair treat because they didn't know about the language.
King Sejong looked those people very poorly so he made Korean language.
So I am proud of my language.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi John:)

Wow. That was very informative. Thank you so much for sharing the history of Hangul. :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

In South Korea, there are many cultures formed when it was very long ago.
>> In South Korea, many cultures were formed a long time ago. 

Our culture started about 4500 years ago so there are a lot of cultures in here.
>> Our culture started about 4500 years ago. 

And I am so proud of Korean language made when it was 1400s.
>> And I am so proud of the Korean language, which was made in the 1400s.

It is made by King Sejong and it is the only language we know the creator.
>> It is made by King Sejong and it is the only language which we know the creator.

Also many historians, archeologists, and scientists are saying Korean language is very scientical language.
>> Also, many historians, archeologists, and scientists are saying that the Korean language is a very scientifical language.

Also there are a lot of things that Korea language is great language.
>> There are more things that make our language special. 

But in my opinion, I think I am proud of the reason King Sejong made Korean language.
>> But in my opinion, I am most proud of the fact that King Sejong invented it. 

Before, many people in Korea were using Chinese language.
>> Before, many people in Korea were using Mandarin. 

But it was hard to study so only aristocrats were able to learn it.
>> CORRECT

King Sejong was very sad about it because the aristocrats were only minority so most of people didn't know about the language.
>> CORRECT

And a lot of people had unfair treat because they didn't know about the language.
>> And a lot of people had experienced unfair treatment because they didn't know how to speak the language. 

King Sejong looked those people very poorly so he made Korean language.
>> King Sejong looked at those people very poorly so he made the Korean language.

So I am proud of my language.
>> This is why I am very proud of my language. 
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