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Do you think health care should be free?

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I think health care should be free for everyone who needs it because health care is very important to improve our health conditions. If health care is not be free, it makes a financial burden on people who do not have money. So, I think the government should give all the financial support about health care for people.

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Hi, Sally!

I totally agree with your opinion and idea. Thank you for sharing about it. 

Please check the corrections and suggestions:

1. I think health care should be free for everyone who needs it because health care is very important to improve our health conditions. 
>> Correct! 
2. If health care is not be free, it makes a financial burden on people who do not have money. 
>> If health care is not for free, it makes a financial burden on people who do not have money.
3. So, I think the government should give all the financial support about health care for people.
>> So, I think the government should give all the financial support about health care to people.
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