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My angry case

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2021-10-27 321

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Last week, I am in angry a lot.
Because I heard my performance team other actors, they talk about my gossip story behind my back.
When I look a person and judged only in my mind, most important thing is talk.
Especially, I hate talk to behind to back other people.
I thnik it is really really bad motion and it's just every fighting case start.
But last week, I does try patience.
Then I get the calm down and I understand they are very pool people.
They are just they.
They are living whole life like that.
I am a winner by my self.

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Hi Ann:)

We all experience different kinds of emotions. It's what makes us humans. There are some that are uncontrollable like anger. Various things makes us angry but we have to know how to manage it well. 

PS: We should never stoop down to people who are bad. We should know that we are better. You did a great job :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Last week, I am in angry a lot.
>> Last week, I was very angry. 

Because I heard my performance team other actors, they talk about my gossip story behind my back.
>> It is because I heard that my fellow actors were talking back at my performance. 

When I look a person and judged only in my mind, most important thing is talk.
>> Whenever I look at that person, I always think that she is a gossiper. 

Especially, I hate talk to behind to back other people.
>> I hate people who talk behind other people's backs. 

I thnik it is really really bad motion and it's just every fighting case start.
>> I think it is a very bad thing to do and it causes fights. 

But last week, I does try patience.
>> But last week, I tried to be patient. 

Then I get the calm down and I understand they are very pool people.
>> I was able to calm down and understood that these people are pitiful. 

They are just they.
>> They are what they are. 

They are living whole life like that.
>> They live their lives like that. 

I am a winner by my self.
>> I shouldn't be bothered because I am not like them. I am better. 
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