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What is something that always makes you angry? Kindly explain.

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In my opinion, my brother's pronunciation is very annoying to me.
He wasn't but nowadays, his pronunciation is really annoying because he speak like he has a lot of dissatisfactions in everything.
So it makes me really angry and it is very uncomfortable to listen.
Fortunately, I made him not to use the pronunciation because I scolded about it.
So now, he is using very nice pronunciation and not to use very annoying pronunciation (maybe).

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Hi John:)

We all experience different kinds of emotions. It's what makes us humans. There are some that are uncontrollable like anger. Various things makes us angry but we have to know how to manage it well. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

In my opinion, my brother's pronunciation is very annoying to me.
>> In my opinion, the way my brother speaks is very annoying for me.

He wasn't but nowadays, his pronunciation is really annoying because he speak like he has a lot of dissatisfactions in everything.
>> He used to not be like that but nowadays, he has this new way of speaking which is really annoying. The way he speaks is that he is unsatisfied with everything. 

So it makes me really angry and it is very uncomfortable to listen.
>> So it makes me really angry and very uncomfortable to listen to. 

Fortunately, I made him not to use the pronunciation because I scolded about it.
>> Fortunately, I made him not speak like that because I scolded him about it.

So now, he is using very nice pronunciation and not to use very annoying pronunciation (maybe).
>> So now, he is talking nicely and not speak the way he used to (maybe).

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