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What is something that always makes you angry?

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What is something that always makes you angry?

Recently, I made me angry thing, I have to work overtime.
I was embarrassed when I didn't plan that day for overtiem.
Finally, I finished the job well, I left the office that lighthearted.

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Hi Monica:)

We all experience different kinds of emotions. It's what makes us humans. There are some that are uncontrollable like anger. Various things makes us angry but we have to know how to manage it well. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Recently, I made me angry thing, I have to work overtime.
>> Recently, the things that make me angry is having to work overtime. 

I was embarrassed when I didn't plan that day for overtiem.
>> I feel embarrasses when I don't play that I will work overtime on that day. 

Finally, I finished the job well, I left the office that lighthearted.
>> Finally as I finished my job well, I leave my office lighthearted. 
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