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Q:Why do you think that Harry Potter books and movies have been so popular all around the world?
A:I think it's because the story of Harry Potter is novelty, so many people would be interested in that books or movies.
I think at that time, many people wasn't that interested in magic, but Harry Potter story is about magic, so many people would be interested in that story.
Also, that story is not that boring, so I think it's a good story about magic and I think it can make peoples' imagination better.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I think it's because the story of Harry Potter is novelty, so many people would be interested in that books or movies.

>> I think it's because the story of Harry Potter is a novelty, so many people would be interested in those books or movies.
I think at that time, many people wasn't that interested in magic, but Harry Potter story is about magic, so many people would be interested in that story.

>> I think at that time a lot of people weren't that interested in magic, but Harry Potter story is about magic then a lot of people became interested in that story.
Also, that story is not that boring, so I think it's a good story about magic and I think it can make peoples' imagination better.

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