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What natural disaster do you fear the most? and why?

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In the world, there are various kinds of natural disasters, and I think yellow dust is the most worst disaster.
First, yellow dust is usually occured in China, and it come to Korea and Japan.
In China, there are a lot of deserts and even tough there is the world second largest desert, Gobi desert.
And the problem is there are some kinds of heavy metals so they make a human body very dangerous.
Also nowadays, it is going worst because of disposable wooden chopsticks.
In South Korea, people are using about two billions five hundreds millions disposable wooden chopsticks
To produce those chopsticks, we have to use many trees.
So China's forests are being deserts and so a lot of yellow dust is coming to Korea.
So if we want to stop this disaster, we should try to do not use those chopsticks, and we should have a interest about this problem.

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In the world, there are various kinds of natural disasters, and I think yellow dust is the most worst disaster.
>> In the world, there are various kinds of natural disasters, and I think yellow dust is the worst one. 

First, yellow dust is usually occured in China, and it come to Korea and Japan.
>> First, yellow dust is usually from China. 

In China, there are a lot of deserts and even tough there is the world second largest desert, Gobi desert.
>> In China, there are a lot of deserts and like  second largest desert, Gobi desert.

And the problem is there are some kinds of heavy metals so they make a human body very dangerous.
>> The problem is that there is some kind of heavy metals in the sand that can be harmful to humans. 

Also nowadays, it is going worst because of disposable wooden chopsticks.
>> Nowadays, it is going to be worst because of disposable wooden chopsticks. 

In South Korea, people are using about two billions five hundreds millions disposable wooden chopsticks
>> CORRECT

To produce those chopsticks, we have to use many trees.
>> CORRECT

So China's forests are being deserts and so a lot of yellow dust is coming to Korea.
>> CORRECT

So if we want to stop this disaster, we should try to do not use those chopsticks, and we should have a interest about this problem.
>> 
So if we want to stop this disaster, we should try to not use those chopsticks, and  have interest about this problem.

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