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good things about korea

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It is good and proud of Korean culture is that there are considerate seats for the old people and pregnant women.
Korea has been called the Eastern Courtesy Land in Asia for a long time.
Most of the people of Korea are kind and considerate.
Of course, i can not say that it's followed as well as it used to be, but we had followed better than other America and Europe.
There are seats for them on the subway and bus, and no matter how tired and seated I am, I try not to sit there.
Most Koreans are kind.
I think Korea is a very safe and good country.

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Hi Evan:)

I totally agree with you. Koreans are the kindest people that I have met as well. :) 

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It is good and proud of Korean culture is that there are considerate seats for the old people and pregnant women.
>> I am proud of Korea's culture because we are very considerate when it comes to seats. We prioritize old people and pregnant women. 

Korea has been called the Eastern Courtesy Land in Asia for a long time.
>> Korea has been called the "Eastern Courtesy Land in Asia" for a long time.

Most of the people of Korea are kind and considerate.
>> Most of the people in Korea are kind and considerate.

Of course, i can not say that it's followed as well as it used to be, but we had followed better than other America and Europe.
>> Of course, I can not say that it's followed as well as it used to be, but we have followed better than America and Europe.

There are seats for them on the subway and bus, and no matter how tired and seated I am, I try not to sit there.
>> CORRECT

Most Koreans are kind.
>> CORRECT

I think Korea is a very safe and good country.
>> CORRECT
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