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what korean do in winter season and what happens.

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For those who in countries without winter, they may be curious about what korean will do in winter.
Winter in Korea is very cold. People prepare and wear new warm winter clothes and organize last summer's clothes.
In different way, I think koreans are very diligent.
In Korea, most people live as usual in winter.
However, peolpe can ride ski or skating, children can enjoy snow sledding.
On Christmas, we can enjoy Christmas with snow.
we can see snow-covered houses and mountains, but there can be accidents due to frozen roads.
Still, it is also special season where we can feel grateful for warm foods that you don't eat in summer.

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Hi Evan:)

It sound like people like to hibernate there in South Korea during winter. hahaha! That sounds relaxing. I wish I can experience the winter season there in too. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

For those who in countries without winter, they may be curious about what korean will do in winter.
>> For those who live in countries that don't have winter, they are curious about what Koreans do during the winter. 

Winter in Korea is very cold. 
>> CORRECT

People prepare and wear new warm winter clothes and organize last summer's clothes.
>> CORRECT

In different way, I think koreans are very diligent.
>> In some way, I think Koreans are very diligent. 

In Korea, most people live as usual in winter.
>> In Korea, most people live the same way as any other season. 

However, peolpe can ride ski or skating, children can enjoy snow sledding.
>> However, people can ski or skat and children can enjoy snow sledding.

On Christmas, we can enjoy Christmas with snow.
>> On Christmas, we can enjoy it with snow.

we can see snow-covered houses and mountains, but there can be accidents due to frozen roads.
>> We can see snow-covered houses and mountains, but there can be accidents due to frozen roads.

Still, it is also special season where we can feel grateful for warm foods that you don't eat in summer.
>> 
Still, it is a special season where we can feel grateful for warm foods that you don't eat in summer.

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