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Turtles can breathe by their hips

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The awesome facts of turtles is "turtles can breathe by their hips". We have to know turtles' hibernation. Since they hide their body in soil, they can't breathe by their noses. So to solve this problem, turtles need other body parts. The other body parts are their hips. I think it is very suprising.
Diary: I took exam today. My score was 97. That's because I took veeeeeeeeery simple mistake. I'll say the problem. "How many natural numbers between these number? (some factions, I can't remember.) " I answered it 1, 2, 3. But the right answer was just 3. I can know the proverb here. I have to check the answers many times. I shouldn't write answer just fast. So I will examine many times to reduce mistakes.

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Hi, Daniel! Thank you for sharing this interesting fact about turtles.   However, be careful with sentence construction please. Take note of the corrections. 

- Teacher Debbie

The awesome facts of turtles is "turtles can breathe by their hips".
>> The awesome fact about turtles is that they can breathe by their hips.

We have to know turtles' hibernation. 
>>  To understand this fact, we have to know first how turtles hibernate.

Since they hide their body in soil, they can't breathe by their noses.
>> They hide their bodies in soil, so they can't breathe by their noses.

So to solve this problem, turtles need other body parts. 
>> To solve this problem, turtles need the other body parts.

The other body parts are their hips. 
>> These are their hips.

I think it is very suprising.
>> I think this is very surprising.

Diary: 

I took exam today. 
>> I took an exam today. 

My score was 97. 
>> This is a good sentence.

That's because I took veeeeeeeeery simple mistake. 
>> That's because I made a very simple mistake.

I'll say the problem. "How many natural numbers between these number? (some factions, I can't remember.) " 
>> This was the problem: how many natural numbers are there between these numbers? I can't remember some of the problems.

I answered it 1, 2, 3. 
>> I answered 1, 2, 3.

But the right answer was just 3.
>> This is a good sentence. 

 I can know the proverb here. 
>> I know the lesson here.

I have to check the answers many times.
>> This is a good sentence.

 I shouldn't write answer just fast.
>> I shouldn't write my answers so fast.

So I will examine many times to reduce mistakes.
>> Therefore, I will review them many times to reduce mistakes.
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