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What natural disaster do you fear the most? and why?

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What I fear the most is fire. I experienced fire two times in my life, which was soon extinguished, so I was relieved at that time. After that, I have a trauma of the fire and I am overcautious of everything causing fire. For example, I have several electrical heating devices at my office for the cold winter. When I leave an office, I have to turn off every electrical device. I always double-check before leaving an office. I also take a picture of the consent to check and make sure when I am home. One winter day when I come home, I have a dubious mind on whether to turn off my electrical device at my office. I cannot help calling a school security guard to check it. Though I seem to be too concerned, it¡¯s not bad to take precautions, It¡¯s better to be safe than sorry.

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Hi Sun Jung:)

That's true. That disaster really is drastic. We need to be very cautious and prepared for these kinds of circumstances. 

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What I fear the most is fire. 
>> CORRECT

I experienced fire two times in my life, which was soon extinguished, so I was relieved at that time. 
>> I have experiences two fires in my life, which was soon extinguished and made me feel relieved. 

After that, I have a trauma of the fire and I am overcautious of everything causing fire. 
>> After that, I had trauma against fires and I became very cautious of everything that can cause it. 

For example, I have several electrical heating devices at my office for the cold winter. 
>> For example, I have several electrical heating devices at my office for the cold weather during winter. 

When I leave an office, I have to turn off every electrical device. 
>> CORRECT

I always double-check before leaving an office. 
>> CORRECT

I also take a picture of the consent to check and make sure when I am home. 
>> CORRECT

One winter day when I come home, I have a dubious mind on whether to turn off my electrical device at my office. 
>> One winter day, when I come home, I have a dubious mind on whether to turn off my electrical device at my office. 

I cannot help calling a school security guard to check it. 
>> I cannot help it so I called the school security guard to check it. 

Though I seem to be too concerned, it¡¯s not bad to take precautions, It¡¯s better to be safe than sorry.
>> Though I seem to be too concerned, it¡¯s not bad to take precautions. It¡¯s better to be safe than sorry.

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