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Halloween costume

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If I wear a Halloween costume, I want to wear look like the squid games red light green light character costume.
It is look like simple but little bit of scary.
And squid game is most popular drama in the world now.
That's why I choose that costume.

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Hi Ann:)

That's a good costume. I wonder what you'd look like when you wear it. Thanks :) 

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If I wear a Halloween costume, I want to wear look like the squid games red light green light character costume.
>> If I will wear a Halloween costume, I would like to look as the girl from the Squid games on the "Red light, Green light! Game."

It is look like simple but little bit of scary.
>> It looks simple but scary at the same time. 

And squid game is most popular drama in the world now.
>> The squid game is the most popular drama in the world right now. 

That's why I choose that costume
>> That's why I will choose that costume. 
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