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What do you think of Korea¡¯s three-phase plan to return to normalcy?

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It¡¯s the right time to return to normalcy because of boosting economic situations. During the pandemic, many businesses were closed, and many people lost their jobs. That makes our economy worse and worse. In addition, the government distributed money to help people in need on the basis of their incomes and properties. But it can cause inflation in business because of too much amount of money in our money market. The balance of money flow is broken, so government struggles to restore the balance. One way is to return to normalcy to have people spend money, and the government collects money from people¡¯s consumption. It can end up recovering the balance in the economy. That¡¯s why we have to start three-phase right now.

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It¡¯s the right time to return to normalcy because of boosting economic situations. 
>> It¡¯s the right time to return to normalcy to boost economic situations. 

During the pandemic, many businesses were closed, and many people lost their jobs.
>> This is a good sentence.

That makes our economy worse and worse.
>> Those made our economy worse.

 In addition, the government distributed money to help people in need on the basis of their incomes and properties.
>> This is a good sentence.

 But it can cause inflation in business because of too much amount of money in our money market.
>> However, it can cause inflation in business because of too much money in our money market.

 The balance of money flow is broken, so government struggles to restore the balance.
>>  The balance of money flow is broken, so the government struggles to restore the balance.

 One way is to return to normalcy to have people spend money, and the government collects money from people¡¯s consumption.
>> One way of restoring the balance is to return to normalcy to have people spend money so that the government can collect money from people¡¯s consumption.

 It can end up recovering the balance in the economy.
>> This is a good sentence.

 That¡¯s why we have to start three-phase right now.
>>  That¡¯s why we have to start the three-phase plan right now.
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