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Since it\'s Halloween season, do you think ghosts are real? Why or why not?

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I believe that a soul is existing in my body.
And some people think that if they die, their souls will be ghosts.
But we don't know that our souls turn into ghosts when we die.
That is just an imagination of humans and actually, we don't know about it.
Rocks, Books, even tough the Earth may have their souls.
We can't know about the next of our lives and also we can't know about the before of our lives.
How can you explain that your soul was not existing in this world?
So I think we can't explain about a ghost.
That is just one of humans imaginations.

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Hi John:)

Me too. I don't believe in ghosts but I am very much afraid of it. Hahaha!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I believe that a soul is existing in my body.
>> I believe that there is a soul in my body. 

And some people think that if they die, their souls will be ghosts.
>> Some people think that when they die, their souls become ghosts. 

But we don't know that our souls turn into ghosts when we die.
>> Although, we don't know whether our souls turn into ghosts. 

That is just an imagination of humans and actually, we don't know about it.
>> That is just a product of our imagination. 

Rocks, Books, even tough the Earth may have their souls.
>> We can't even tell whether there are souls. 

We can't know about the next of our lives and also we can't know about the before of our lives.
>> We don't know what happened or what will happen in our lives. 

How can you explain that your soul was not existing in this world?
>> CORRECT

So I think we can't explain about a ghost.
>> So I think there is no logical explanation about ghosts. 

That is just one of humans imaginations.
>> That is just a product of human imaginations. 
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