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If I don't work an engineer, I was a Olympic athlete
because I like exercising with my body, running, cycling swimming like that.
and also I like challenging to the extreme with my heart and body

If I can choice a major or can experience, I want to live member of national Korean team

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Hi there Ethan!

I hope that you are doing great! I have not seen you in class but thank you for sending me this homework.

Being an Olympic athlete demands so much time and effort. Actually, you have to devote your whole life to perfecting the sports you want. But then, there are so much reward for all these training.

Anyway, the suggestions are all included below. Please go over them. Some sentences need some period and all letters of the first word of the sentences need to be in capital letters. Well done! 

See you in class!

-T. Donna =)

If I don't work an engineer, I was a Olympic athlete
>> If I don't work as an engineer, I might be an Olympic athlete.

because I like exercising with my body, running, cycling swimming like that.
>> This is because I like exercising, running, cycling, swimming, and things like these.

and also I like challenging to the extreme with my heart and body
>> And also, I like challenging extremely my heart and body.

If I can choice a major or can experience, I want to live member of national Korean team
>> If I can choose a major or can experience another, I want to live with members of the National Korean Team.
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