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Men are usually stronger than women physically but it is not true that they are more competitive than women. I think that it depends on the field. Women are good at arts whereas men are more talented on sports. Traditionally, women dealt with house chores and men earned money for their family. Women didn't have any opportunities to compete with men before, however, it has changed a lot that most countries have tried to hire more women and the point of view toward women has changed as well. Therefore, women are working most grounds recently. Some companies prefer to hire women rather than men because their strength. Many women put their efforts a lot more than men because of social awareness and stereotype about them. Many people still think that men are better than women in any situation but there are numerous women who are skillful, intelligent and competent. In conclusion, It's an undeniable fact that men are physically stronger than women but they are not always more competitive tha

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Hi there Mr. Hwang! About how many times have you answered this question? hahaha Anyway, my apologies for that. Thanks for the class today! Have a good one!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Men are usually stronger than women physically but it is not true that they are more competitive than women.
>>> CORRECT
 I think that it depends on the field. 
>>>  I think, it depends on the field. 
Women are good at arts whereas men are more talented on sports.
>>> CORRECT
 Traditionally, women dealt with house chores and men earned money for their family.
>>> CORRECT
 Women didn't have any opportunities to compete with men before, however, it has changed a lot that most countries have tried to hire more women and the point of view towards women has changed as well. 
>>> CORRECT
Therefore, women are working on most grounds recently. 
>>> CORRECT
Some companies prefer to hire women rather than men because their strength.
>>> Some companies prefer to hire women rather than men because of their strength.
 Many women put their efforts a lot more than men because of social awareness and stereotype about them. 
>>> CORRECT
Many people still think that men are better than women in any situation but there are numerous women who are skillful, intelligent and competent. 
>>> CORRECT
In conclusion, it's an undeniable fact that men are physically stronger than women but they are not always more competitive than women.
>>> CORRECT
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