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I've traveled many places in vacations and in my opinion, the vacation 4 years ago was the best vacation for me.
I've traveled Canada and United States four years ago and it was very fun to me.
I've traveled Quebec, Montreal, Boston, and Whashington.
It was very interesting for me and it was the best vacation I've ever had.

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I've traveled many places in vacations and in my opinion, the vacation 4 years ago was the best vacation for me.
>> I've traveled to many places for vacation but in my opinion, my travel trip 4 years ago was the best. 

I've traveled Canada and United States four years ago and it was very fun to me.
>> We went to Canada and USA during that time and I had so much fun. 

I've traveled Quebec, Montreal, Boston, and Whashington.
>> We went to Quebec, Montreal, Boston, and Washington.

It was very interesting for me and it was the best vacation I've ever had.
>> It was very interesting for me and was the best vacation I've ever had.

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