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1. What is hoarding? 2. Are you a hoarder? Tell me why.

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Hoarding is purchase items continually.
Though the items were already purchased , it can¡¯t stop to buy again.
I am not a hoarder.
But there is one thing that I buy continually.
It is a chocolate.
It help me get rid of stress.
When I angry at my daughters, I eat a chocolate immediately.
It make me calm down.
I think it seems a habit.
Although I feel like change this habit, I think it seems to be difficult for me now.
If I had no chocolate in my daily life, I wouldn¡¯t feel right.

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Hello there Ms. Eun Yeong! Thank you for telling me your thought about this topic. Keep up the good work! Take care!
Aki~
Hoarding is purchase items continually.
>>> Hoarding is purchasing items continually.
Though the items were already purchased , it can¡¯t stop to buy again.
>>> Though I already purchased an item, I can't stop buying them again.
I am not a hoarder.
 >>> CORRECT!
OR >>> I don't consider myself as a hoarder.
But there is one thing that I buy continually.
 >>> CORRECT!
OR >>> However, there is one thing that I continuously buy.
It is a chocolate.
 >>>  CORRECT
OR >>> They are the chocolates.
It help me get rid of stress.
 >>>  it helps me get rid of my stress.
When I angry at my daughters, I eat a chocolate immediately.
 >>>  When I am angry at my daughters, I eat chocolate immediately
It make me calm down.
>>> It makes me calm.
>>> It calms me down.
I think it seems a habit.
>>> It seems like a habit
>>> It became a habit.
Although I feel like change this habit, I think it seems to be difficult for me now.
>>> Although I feel like changing this habit, I think it is difficult for me now.
If I had no chocolate in my daily life, I wouldn¡¯t feel right.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> If there is no chocolate at home, I wouldn't feel right.
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