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What website do you often use and why?

I often use NAVER portal.
It is the conveniences to use for everybody.
It is eay to payment in internet and also
Naver Portal makes price comarisions as easy as clicking the mouse.
Also, it easy to sign the payment.
That's why Naver is the best portal site in our country.

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Hi Monica:)

Those are really good applications and websites :) Thanks for sharing. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I often use NAVER portal.
>> I often use "Naver". 

It is the conveniences to use for everybody.
>> It is very convenient for everybody. 

It is eay to payment in internet and also
>> It makes it easy to pay using the internet. 

Naver Portal makes price comarisions as easy as clicking the mouse.
>> And it also makes price comparison by making a few clicks. 

Also, it easy to sign the payment.
>> It makes payments very easy. 

That's why Naver is the best portal site in our country.
>> CORRECT
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