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How often do you eat chicken? Do you think chicken is healthy?

작성자: 이*현
2021-11-05 397

회원님의 영작문

I love chicken. I love fried food.
l eat chicken about twice a month. Number of eating is lower than past.
I heard fried food is not healthy because It has too much fat.
However, I think chicken is more healthy than the foods based flour which are like tteokbokki, pizza, etc..
When I eat the food, my digestion doesn't work well.
And spicy food make my stomach to be hurt.
Chicken is based protein and when I eat not too much, my digestion works well.
Eating chicken too much is really not healthy, but Eating too much all food is not healthy too.
Delicious foods can be not healthy, but they are good for mental health and can reduce stress.
Sometimes eating delicious food which I want make me happy.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi there, Kang!

I am glad to see your answer for today's question.  We definitely love chicken and all kinds of meat.  But we have to watch what we eat for our health. :D


-T. Maine


I love chicken. I love fried food.

>>Correct.
 l eat chicken about twice a month.

>>Correct.

Number of eating is lower than past.

>>The amount of food I eat is lower now than the past.
 I heard fried food is not healthy because It has too much fat.

>>I heard friend food is not healthy because it has too much fat.
 However, I think chicken is more healthy than the foods based flour which are like tteokbokki, pizza, etc..

>>However, I think chicken is healthier than foods made of flour which are like tteokbokki, pizza, etc.
 When I eat the food, my digestion doesn't work well.

>>When I eat food, my digestion doesn't work well.
 And spicy food make my stomach to be hurt.

>>And spicy food makes my stomach painful.
 Chicken is based protein and when I eat not too much, my digestion works well.

>>Chicken is full of protein and when I don't eat too much, my digestion works well.
 Eating chicken too much is really not healthy, but Eating too much all food is not healthy too.

>>Eating too much chicken is really not healthy as well as eating too much food.
 Delicious foods can be not healthy, but they are good for mental health and can reduce stress.

>>Some delicious foods are not healthy at all, but they are good for our emotional and mental health, for example they reduce our stress.
 Sometimes eating delicious food which I want make me happy.

>>Sometimes eating delicious food I want makes me happy.


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