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Why I like a children\'s day.

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The children's day is may 5. And I like a children's day.
That is because the children can have present in children's day.
My second reason is children can buy everything in the children's day.
My third reason is children can have love of my parents.
Finally, children are also happy in children's day.

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Hi, Joey! Thank you for sharing about your favorite holiday.   

Please take note of the ff:

a. Remember to always capitalize the first letter of proper nouns (Children's Day, May).
b. Use the preposition ON for days and dates.

- Teacher Debbie

The children's day is may 5.  
>> Children's Day is on May 5.

And I like a children's day.
>> I like Children's Day.

That is because the children can have present in children's day.
>> That is because children like me can get presents on that day.

My second reason is children can buy everything in the children's day.
>> My second reason is we can buy everything on that day. 

My third reason is children can have love of my parents.
>> My third reason is we feel more loved by our parents.

Finally, children are also happy in children's day.
>> Therefore, children are happy on Children's Day.


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