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Hello,everyone! Today, I introduce animal ant and aphid. Ant and aphid are symbiotic relationship. They are smaller than table-tennis ball. they help each other To live.
I think.... It is good to live by symbiotic relationship. This is because.... Living in a symbiotic relationship is mutually beneficial. hahaha~~
Now, how do they help each other? First, Ants protect aphids from Ladybugs.(because, Ladybug are aphid's natural enemies)
second, Ants get aphid's excreta. Aphid's excreta is Great food to ants. i think.... It is dirty but Ants think, 'oh It is delicious To me'.
Ants are smaller than ladybugs. Ants are as brave as a Lion!
Ants like breeding. Ants breed aphids and Ants breed mushroom!!
I don't like breeding....
I think... It is desirable but I'm okay, I'm not ant^^^^^^
Good bye! everyone!!!
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Thank you for doing your homework. ^^

Hello,everyone! Today, I introduce animal ant and aphid. Ant and aphid are symbiotic  relationship. 
>>>Hello everyone, Today, I will an insect and it's an aphid. Ants and aphids have a symbiotic  relationship. 

They are smaller than table-tennis ball. they help each other To live.
>>They are smaller than a table-tennis ball and they help each other.

I think.... It is good to live by symbiotic relationship. This is because.... Living in a symbiotic relationship is mutually beneficial. hahaha~~
>>I think, it is good to live in a symbiotic relationship. This is because, living in a symbiotic relationship is mutually beneficial. hahaha~~

Now, how do they help each other? First, Ants protect aphids from Ladybugs.(because, Ladybug are aphid's natural enemies)
>>>Now, how do they help each other? First, ants protect aphids from ladybugs.(because, ladybugs are aphid's natural enemies)


second, Ants get aphid's excreta. Aphid's excreta is Great food to ants. i think.... It is dirty but Ants think, 'oh It is delicious To me'.
>>Secondly, ants get aphid's excreta. Aphid's excreta are good food for ants. I think it is dirty, but ants think, 'oh it is delicious'.

Ants are smaller than ladybugs. Ants are as brave as a Lion!
>>Even though ants are smaller than ladybugs. ants are as brave as a lion!

Ants like breeding. Ants breed aphids and Ants breed mushroom!!
>>>Ants like breeding. Ants breed aphids and ants breed mushrooms!!

I don't like breeding....I  think... It is desirable but I'm okay, I'm not ant^^^^^^
>>>I don't like breeding. I think it is desirable, but I'm okay for now. I'm not an ant. ^^


Good bye! everyone!!!
--Thank you for reading--
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