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My favourite food is Korean traditional food, like Kimchi soup, Korean pizza-Bindaedduck, and Jjajangmyeon....
I live in Australia\'s region(the countryside), so I haven\'t got Korean food. Here haven\'t Korean food market and restaurants.
Here\'s only placed Asian food market and other Asian restaurants(Thi, Chinese...)

That\'s why when I go to big city(like Sydney..) I always buy much Korean food.
My husband also Korean so we love to Korean food.
It\'s expensive but we thanks about we can buy it here.

Also I like beef steak and pasta too. The Australia is famous of beef. It is good for me.
It\'s cheaper than Korea and the quality is normally better.
But it\'s very difficult for us what a find good quality restaurant, because I live in region(countryside).

I've became hungry, because I wrote about favourite food.
I should have to eat something now. Thank you.

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My favourite food is Korean traditional food, like Kimchi soup, Korean pizza-Bindaedduck, and Jjajangmyeon....

>> My favourite food is Korean traditional food, like Kimchi soup, Korean pizza-Bindaedduck, and Jjajangmyeon.
I live in Australia\'s region(the countryside), so I haven\'t got Korean food. Here haven\'t Korean food market and restaurants.

>> I live in Australia's countryside, so I haven't eaten any Korean food yet, nor visit a Korean food market and restaurants.
Here\'s only placed Asian food market and other Asian restaurants(Thi, Chinese...)
>> The only Asian restaurant available are Thai and Chinese restaurants.
That\'s why when I go to big city(like Sydney..) I always buy much Korean food.

>> That's why when I go to the big cities like Sydney, I always buy a lot of Korean food.
My husband also Korean so we love to Korean food.

>> My husband is also a Korean, so we both love Korean food.
It\'s expensive but we thanks about we can buy it here.
>> It's expensive, but we're thankful because we can buy it here.
Also I like beef steak and pasta too. The Australia is famous of beef. It is good for me.

>> Also, I like beef steak and pasta too. The Australia is famous for beef and it is good to me.
It\'s cheaper than Korea and the quality is normally better.

>> It's cheaper than the beef and pasta in Korea and the quality is better.
But it\'s very difficult for us what a find good quality restaurant, because I live in region(countryside).
>> 
But it's very difficult for us to find a good quality restaurant, because we live in the countryside.
I've became hungry, because I wrote about favourite food.

>> Now, I feel hungry because I'm talking about my favorite foods.
I should have to eat something now. Thank you.

>> I should eat something now. Thank you!

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