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What was the most interesting thing that you did during the vacation?

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My last vacation is travel in Donghae with my boy friend.
Donghae si is beside the Donghae sea, so I really enjoyed the sea.
We drove beside the beach, and visited many beaches.
The best exciting thing was surfing.
It is my first time, but the coach said I was skillful.
I found my talent of surfing.
I could stand on surfing board easily, and could go far away.
Demerits was weather. The wind is so weak, so waves is so small.
Small waves were not suitable for surfing.
And the weather was cool, so when I'm in water for a long time, I was cold.
However, my boyfriend and I played in the water for a long time until my lips changed blue color.
I used to love to dabble in water, but I can't do it for 1 year because of pendemic, so It is very exciting time for me.
I wish to dabble in water freely without virus in future.

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Hello Kang!

Traveling is really interesting especially with the people we love.  Enjoy traveling and exploring the world more. ^^


-T. Maine


My last vacation is travel in Donghae with my boy friend.

>>My last vacation was in Donghae with my boyfriend.
 Donghae si is beside the Donghae sea, so I really enjoyed the sea.

>>Donghae is beside the sea, so I really enjoyed the view.
 We drove beside the beach, and visited many beaches.

>>We drove beside the seashore and visited many beaches.
 The best exciting thing was surfing.

>>The most exciting thing was surfing.
 It is my first time, but the coach said I was skillful.

>>It was my first time surfing, but the coach said I was skillful.
 I found my talent of surfing.

>>I certainly found my talent.
 I could stand on surfing board easily, and could go far away.

>>I could easily stand on the surfing board and go far away.
 Demerits was weather.

>>The only disadvantage was the weather.  

The wind is so weak, so waves is so small.

>>The wind was so weak, so the waves so not so good.
 Small waves were not suitable for surfing.

>>Correct.
 And the weather was cool, so when I'm in water for a long time, I was cold.

>>Correct. 

>>OR: I felt cold in the water for a long time.
 However, my boyfriend and I played in the water for a long time until my lips changed blue color.

>>However, my boyfriend and I played in the water for a long time until my lips changed to blue color.
 I used to love to dabble in water, but I can't do it for 1 year because of pendemic, so It is very exciting time for me.

>>I used to love dabbling in the water, but I could not do it for a year because of the pandemic.  So it was an exciting time for me.
 I wish to dabble in water freely without virus in future.

>>I wish to dabble in the water freely without any worries in the future.


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