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Do you think people who are 12-17 years old should already get vaccinated as well? Why or why not?

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Covid19 is very harmful virus so it is good to get vaccinated.
It is find to the most adults to be vaccinated but kids might not.
So I think goverments have to give a choice to the kids.
Kids can get vaccinated if they are afraid of Covid19, and also they can not get vaccinated because of potential danger of the vaccine.
We don't know the vaccines are harmful or beneficial to kids' body yet.
So I think we have to give them a choice.

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Hi John:)

The Centers for Disease Control and Prevention (CDC) now recommends a COVID-19 vaccine for children ages 5 and older. 

They can protect kids from getting infected with the coronavirus that causes COVID-19. Vaccines are now available for adults and all children ages 5 and older. Everyone who is eligible should get vaccinated as soon as possible.

Occasionally, a vaccinated person may get infected with the virus or even get mild symptoms. This is called a "breakthrough infection." But the vaccine is very good at preventing serious illness, hospitalization, and death due to COVID-19.

Despite that, it's still a personal choice. Although doctors still highly recommends it. 

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Covid19 is very harmful virus so it is good to get vaccinated.
>> Covid-19 is a very harmful virus so it is good to get vaccinated.

It is find to the most adults to be vaccinated but kids might not.
>> It should be a must for adults to get vaccinated but for kids, it shouldn't be. 

So I think goverments have to give a choice to the kids.
>> I think the government should a choice for children whether to have it or not. 

Kids can get vaccinated if they are afraid of Covid19, and also they can not get vaccinated because of potential danger of the vaccine.
>> Kids can get vaccinated if they are afraid of Covid19, and also they can not get vaccinated because of potential danger of the vaccine.

We don't know the vaccines are harmful or beneficial to kids' body yet.
>> We don't know yet if the vaccine is harmful or beneficial to a kid's body yet. 

So I think we have to give them a choice.
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